One day when I was walking down Clock Street to get to Main Park. Regularly I see the lime store, nice and sturdy, but last week it got set on fire. There are still little flames around where the lime store used to be.
Then I saw a new store by main park. I ran to the store, the store was called ‘the beauty of ice’ I looked inside the new store It had Ice sculptures in it.
“WOW” I said amazed.
I stepped into the new store It was ice cold in there and the person at the front desk was frozen.
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