As she
stairs at the flowing
river she thinks about the day ahead. Her cousins were coming to play and she did not like them very much because they yell they scream and shout and they get louder and louder by the minute when she got back inside she started to cook some
pink cookies she
cooked and cooked till she had enough to keep them busy for at least half an hour. When her cousins arrived she got
nervous. Would they like her cookies or will the hate her cookies. When they got inside they yelled and they screamed and shouted. They got louder and louder so she gave them her pink cookies that she cooked….
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