I was on the PS4 playing Fortnite, I almost won my first solo match until Mum interrupted, she got in my way, I tried looking around her but she moved again. I paused the game not like you can pause an online game. “Timmy can you dry and put away the dishes, your sister has already washed them for you,” I didn’t reply. “I mean NOW Timmy.” I moaned “Why now, why not later.” “Because I said so.” “Ugh fine I whipped my headphones off my head and I saw myself die in the game in front of me. My sister was grinning at me.
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