“Doo de doo de” I was just walking to bank and saw this lady with a pretty yellow dress near the bank and then I wondered, I’ve seen this lady before. So i thought and thought and I thought. Then she wore her glasses and now i noticed her she was my Mum’s friend. Then a gorilla jumped out of the bank. Everybody was screaming and running for their lives. Then it smashed bricks from every shop there is. Then it took a nap right next to my mom’s friend and then threw it away like the hulk. Like a boss.
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