I wonder what is behind this door I said one day to my best friend Ava as we walked through the forest back to our homes the door was blue with a big rip in it we looked through the rip and we seen a world of fighting then we went on our way the next's day after school we walked through the frost we seen the door again this time there was green nose running out this time we were scared we ran home the next day the door was open at there were monster everywhere ...
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