Ahhh,came a scream in a distance.It was Young pretty woman running for her life because there was an gorilla named Bobo chasing at the wild ,uncool zoo. Bobo was in shock that someone was running away from him .This happened for the first time, the pretty wore a beautiful yellow poke-a-dots dress. The lady ran so hard she got got tired so she started to ride her bike.She biked so hard she got tired so she went on her husband´s motorbike,but the motorbike was on the fastest speed that it had no petrol.So she ran so more all the way home.
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Thursday, November 15, 2018
Nandani 100wc #10
Ahhh,came a scream in a distance.It was Young pretty woman running for her life because there was an gorilla named Bobo chasing at the wild ,uncool zoo. Bobo was in shock that someone was running away from him .This happened for the first time, the pretty wore a beautiful yellow poke-a-dots dress. The lady ran so hard she got got tired so she started to ride her bike.She biked so hard she got tired so she went on her husband´s motorbike,but the motorbike was on the fastest speed that it had no petrol.So she ran so more all the way home.
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Hello nandani , i liked your story because it was funny . Perhaps you could add more details next time . Your friend angelo.
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