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So good
ReplyDeleteThis was a really interesting way of using the prompt Olivia, well done! I haven't seen anyone else use vinegar in this way in their stories. Are you really allergic to bees or where did you get the idea from? Don't forget to check you work for capital letters. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteMs Gray
Balbriggan
Ireland
https://www.nightzookeeper.com/edu/zoo/class-blog/5b98ee013b9fce0003a739e3