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i like the way that you said what the vinegar was to sharp.
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ReplyDeleteI like that you raided the staff room for supplies. As a kid I always wondered what they had in there. As a teacher,I'm disappointed that it isn't more fun. Maybe if I blow up a volcano in there it will seem fun. Great writing! I would suggest using more specific words instead of "stuff" it will help the reader understand exactly what you mean.
Write often,
Ms. McBride #team100wc Los Angeles
hmmmm that was very nice keira i used to make a volcano in my old school maybe how it works is as a vinegar or baking soda but that was nice or maybe that works for you okay? forget it ignore what i comment okay keira
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