As I was walking into my house everything started to disappear. I got so scared as this weird sound started .I run up the stairs and down to my mums room I screamed as I looked around mum m m m mum. This sound arapeard your mum isn't here I whispered who are you go aways freeky voice ,a random thing appeared do you want some candy yes, yes please. I saw that candy bar sign ,and a ugly white thing was in there I cried no no I don't want candy .I ran out of my house screaming help me help me there is a ghost in my house.
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