John and his family went on a long holiday camping trip, in their camper van on a hill where is a beautiful view of the half of the moon. John want to pose with the moon, his older son josh have to take the picture john thinks he's holding the moon. At 9:00pm they went to bed but they did not sleep the kids were playing on their device and the parents were watching the small tv. It was 10:35pm their mum told the kids to go to sleep. Two small twins named zack and jack sleep together and big brother sleep by himself the twins are boys they are only 6 years old. The next morning they all wake at 7:10am their breakfast was bacon and egg on toast the twins want to go to the beach because it was a hot and sunny day they agreed they went to the beach the sand was soft the twins went to the wet sand to build their sand castle. Big brother josh jump into the ocean water zack make a pool near the water to fill it up he dig it so deep when the salty water came in it went into the hole all the sand in the water start swishing around.
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