Once upon a time there lived a man who wanted to visit the moon, but he was poor and stupid he was also determined so he saved up every single day. Eventually, he had enough money to go to America now he had to become smart so he went to 29 different colleges till he was really really smart then he went to NASA and asked for a job they said yes, but he had to sit an exam, he passed and trained to become an astronaut years later he went to the moon we know him as Neil Armstrong
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