As I stood up straight I heard some green slime oozing from under my bed , then heard a tail slamming on the floor as if it were trying to get out all the anger.Of course I heard them before I saw them , their faces looked liked they came out of a horror movie!Wait wait wait where is my Mum and Dad? Oh no I am in a horror movie! I ran for the door to get outside it was locked! The monsters crept closer and closer then...Surprise all of my family and friends where their and celebrating my birthday what a cool surprise!
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