I was in my room and I was in bed and I tried to get up but I could not see where I was. Because I was in a dream how silly am I but then I noticed that I was not in a dream.It was that weirdest thing ive been in for a long time I did not know what to do what to eat and what to drink.And then I saw my mum and I ran over to her and gave her a hug and then I saw Alvey it was good it see him it made me feel better and not scared
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