Time to go to the supermarket say’s mum we all jumped in the car and off we go . We all hop out , and race through the car park mum growls ” walk and look where you're going”. we are no longer than a metre away from the door “ding dong”, we walk in ,There are five sets of bananas one was red one was orange one was blue the last 2 were pink and green.I think they talk or something you know like a machine . The orange one spoke first it said Helloooow young girl . I was real freaked.
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