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Sunday, November 17, 2019

100WC - Week #11 - Keira - Friend comes over

School was finished, me and my friend Jack were planning to ask my Mum if he could come over. We went to my Mums car “Mum” I say “can Jack come over?”
“Fine” Mum replies
We arrive at my house and get some food “Can I have marmite” Jack says
“Okay” Mum replies but then she gets out the honey
“No,” he said, “I like marmite.
Mum grabs out the marmite and spreads it on to the bread “here you go” She says
“Thanks” He replies
While Mum makes my sandwich me and Jack go outside and play on the trampoline and have some fun. We hear a car noise going up my driveway then I hear a little shout “JACK” his Mum was here, she was picking him up, He had to go home...

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1 comment:

  1. AnonymousNovember 24, 2019 at 3:57 PM

    Keira, I have never tried marmite, but after reading all these posts this week, I am sure to pick up a jar when I am at the grocery store soon, and give it a go. Since I like most foods, I am hopeful that I, like Jack in your piece, will enjoy it.
    Keep writing.
    Mrs. G. Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA

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