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Thursday, November 14, 2019

A MYSTERY LONG LOST 100WC Week 10 Mitchell Brown

A crime scene littered with crimson liquid everywhere “Blood!” the Deputy bellowed. It was like abstract art.
“Who could have done this?” the Sheriff questioned as he glanced at the lifeless body next to him,
as the crime scene Investigator questioned the Sheriff, “Sheriff did you turn the oven on?”
The air unbreathable.
 Unbeknownst to the Sheriff,The lifeless body next to him had whipped out a gun.
Boom the house was in rubble and dust they were gone.
Lost or dead.
“That's all the information we have on what happened,” said the Director
right that moment slam “or is it,” as the stranger showed his badge.
Who was the man.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Mitchell
    Your 100WC started in a really intriguing way but I got a little lost as I read the rest. Maybe next time you could add more detail so the reader understands your story.

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