Silent School
Silence! Yelled Mr Fraiser. “Ugh” I thought “why do we have to be so qui-” suddenly I got hit in the chest so hard that I got flown across the auditorium. Everyone screamed but I couldn’t feel anything, all I could feel was the throbbing painful wound of were I got hit. I looked up everyone was running out of the auditorium i got up, I looked around and saw a little glowing stone I walked over to it, when I tried to pick it up I felt a ginormous flow of energy surging through my body. I saw my pink giraffe, everything was dusty. I saw myself singing, I think I sang...
The way you described how painful the wound was made it quite exciting. Great way to use the words. Perhaps you could use google translate to see if any of your words are spelt wrong.
ReplyDeleteI like how you described the way the energy flowed through your body.
Nice Job. Continue Writing.
-Kenneth