I'm riding my dirtbike at a nice place similar to the grand canyon. "This is epic" I yell just before I ride up the hill. I take a little glance over to the right between these two hills I say to myself what was that so as soon as I bolted up the hill. I stop it took me about 10 seconds to see it again then aha i see it. It kinda looks like some old nightmarishing house it looks so spine chilling. As I frightfully turn and hop on my bike again hmm it is scary but wonder what could be in there then I ride off.
I think u need to put your wordes smoall a but grate work from phoenix
ReplyDeleteI liked the story, and I liked how you described the house. I do think you could’ve had more commas, but it was still very good.
ReplyDelete-Giova