I stare out into the vast waves of heads, this is my moment. If I muck up, I’ll be embarrassed for the rest of my life. Known as Jack, the clown. I take a deep breath, and step out. The crowd goes silent, I make the performance. But then I fell over onto the stage, then the crowd erupted with laughter. I was a laughing stock, everyone was crying tears of laughter. That day stayed with me my whole life, I still have flashbacks of that day. The sounds of everyone making fun of me. I was Jack the clown.
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I enjoyed reading this because . . .
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Next time you write . . .
Think about adding . . .
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To improve your . . . try . . .
Perhaps you could . . .