I wanted to take my FLUFFY dog for a walk, but Mum said I had to practise my ballet dance in my room, and then I could go and walk the dog. So I went into my room and DANCED my whole dance. I told Mum I was done, and she said that I could walk the dog. But I couldn't be bothered walking! I asked Mum if I could walk the dog on my new RED electric SCOOTER. Mum said yes. So I went outside and scooted down the CONCRETE driveway. After a 1 hour, I went back home.
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