Thursday, December 6, 2018

100WC Week #13 - Rebecca

“Come on we got..ta, fin..ish this race,” I said panting for air.
“Yes lets..let's do this”
...but they were exhausted…
“I don't feel to great i am light headed and can’t breath”
“No help somebody help he has collapsed and is not responsive!”
The teachers came rushing over calling 111
“ hi we have a 11 year old boy collapse and is not responding”
“ ok we have an ambulance on the way stay on the phone”

“Everybody needs to stay calm we have an ambulance on the way”
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1 comment:

  1. AnonymousDecember 14, 2018 at 11:53 AM

    I like this story, but I don’t know what point of view it’s so post to be. In the future think of putting it in one point of view.

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