...Then it began…
The war.
Bam, pow goes to the other soldier's gun.
The wet mud sinking into my cold wet outfit. Heaps of dead bodies lying at the bottom of the trenches. Blood splattered everywhere.
I try to rest. But it just does not work.
“Your up, Go fight for the country” says the leader.
It's my time to shine. I dont know how i am going to do this with my body half asleep. I get up from the trenches to see misery, blood, cannons, bodys.
I see this gunman behind me…
Then it happened.
Bam, pow goes to the other soldier's gun.
The wet mud sinking into my cold wet outfit. Heaps of dead bodies lying at the bottom of the trenches. Blood splattered everywhere.
I try to rest. But it just does not work.
“Your up, Go fight for the country” says the leader.
It's my time to shine. I dont know how i am going to do this with my body half asleep. I get up from the trenches to see misery, blood, cannons, bodys.
I see this gunman behind me…
Then it happened.
Hi Milah
ReplyDeleteThis is my third attempt to put a comment on your 100 word challenge! I tried yesterday and when I pressed publish correctly this time the comment just disappeared and I got an error page. I was trying to remember yesterday what I had written in the first comment which also mysteriously disappeared and what I remembered especially was that I really enjoyed reading your 100 word challenge as I felt it was written like a poem. In your writing you really captured in words the awfulness of war and the terrible conditions that soldiers in the trenches endured. You have used your words well to create the atmosphere and the tension of the trenches, words like "the wet mud sinking into my cold wet outfit" . You've also used the prompt in a very clever way leaving your piece on a gripping cliffhanger. I would love to know what happened next. Well done and keep up the good work
Máire O'Keeffe (Team 100wc)
Galway, Ireland
Hi Milah
ReplyDeleteThis is my third attempt to put a comment on your 100 word challenge! I tried yesterday and when I pressed publish correctly this time the comment just disappeared and I got an error page. I was trying to remember yesterday what I had written in the first comment which also mysteriously disappeared and what I remembered especially was that I really enjoyed reading your 100 word challenge as I felt it was written like a poem. In your writing you really captured in words the awfulness of war and the terrible conditions that soldiers in the trenches endured. You have used your words well to create the atmosphere and the tension of the trenches, words like "the wet mud sinking into my cold wet outfit" . You've also used the prompt in a very clever way leaving your piece on a gripping cliffhanger. I would love to know what happened next. Well done and keep up the good work
Máire O'Keeffe (Team 100wc)
Galway, Ireland
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