Finally Mum was coming back home from Aussie so I
cooked her her favorite dinner, pork meatballs and ham. I was very
nervous because I had never made them before. So I got the ham out and it was a horrible
pink colour it made me want to spew. Before Mum got home I was going to run up the
stairs and when she walked in I was going to surprise her and we were going to have dinner by the
river. Then what felt like hours she finally came home but everything went wrong from that moment.
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