I am so tired I felt light and drowsy struggling to get into bed.As I turned my head the world spun around me what had happened.In the morning I had a real big head ache my mum told me I passed out in her room so she and Dad slept in my room.I saw unconscious bodies scattered all over the house ¨WOW ̈ I cried.̈ What had happened ̈ I asked ̈the party went a little bit overboard ̈Mum whispered.̈ ̈MUM WHY IS GRANNY HERE!̈ ̈ I yelled.̈ ̈Umm I don't know?̈Mum answered.
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