Walking into the spaceship I get butterflies not the normal ones, the ones that feel like they will be the death of you. ̈ ̈Buckle up ̈ a loud noise comes out of the speaker I buckled up turned on all of the switches and buttons and sat back I quietly prayed this might be my last time on earth I slowly stutter to myself 3, 2, 1, blast of a strong wind pulls me back.I sit in silence and the gravity lets me go I get out of my seat and as I turn around the whole world spun...
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