As I was walking up the hill to my dream house I immediately fell back ,which I thought was quite random but as I turned my head the world spun ,it felt like I was on a spinny thing and the person pushing it lose control but I was going really fast it was like I was flying to the moon.I was a bit under control I was smashing into everything and everyone I broke like 100 things .
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