Monday, July 23, 2018

Special Prompt #1 - Trent Allen

The Skyscraper

I was on top of a skyscraper. There was a man there with a gun pointing at me. I am tired, I can not run anymore.  I thought it was the end. Then an idea popped into my head, "I know I will jump of the edge'' but before I could do and thing he grabbed.  He told me to look over the edge. So, as  I looked over the edge, I saw absolutely nothing. I was glad I didn't jump. Then I saw a flagpole and a flag. I jumped grabbed the flag and went fast down the flagpole.

By Trent

1 comment:

  1. Trent
    I really liked the way you use the promt '…so, as I looked over the edge, I saw…' how you did.
    from Natasha

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