The Magical Door
Nick loved magic and fairies and princesses and the colour pink but the one thing she hated the most and she never wanted to go there or hear the name of was a forest. But one day she went to the forest just to see what was in it and then she saw blew her mind it was a magical pink sparkly door so she went in and when she got where it lead she was shocked. Everything was pink she LOVED it she wanted to stay there forever and ever and never go back home.
Nick loved magic and fairies and princesses and the colour pink but the one thing she hated the most and she never wanted to go there or hear the name of was a forest. But one day she went to the forest just to see what was in it and then she saw blew her mind it was a magical pink sparkly door so she went in and when she got where it lead she was shocked. Everything was pink she LOVED it she wanted to stay there forever and ever and never go back home.
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