Tuesday, October 16, 2018

100WC #6 - Lucy

“Hey Birthday Boy, what’s your favourite color??” yelled Mum.
“Orange!” I yelled back.
But there was no time for favourite colours, I was too busy being a fighter… No evil person would ever come past me not even bath time could stop me!!!
“Muahahahahahaha!! You will never get past me!!” I yelled
Then someone sneaked up behind hit me on the shoulders and yelled
“BOO!!”
“Ow” I yelled and I clumsily danced away.
And then it was time for my birthday.

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1 comment:

  1. AnonymousOctober 22, 2018 at 8:55 AM

    I liked the way you made the 5 words bold and added lots of detail. Maybe you should think about not starting a sentence with and. Your friend-Angelo

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