One day me and my sister went to a park and there I saw a Lego
person on the stones and then my little brother had said let’s get this and
take it home to put in our other collection and mum said ok so then the 2 boys
took it home and then they had played with it the hole time and then mum said
time to go home so then we took it home and then we went to go home.
The next day Dad said where did you get that Lego man and Liam
said I found it at the playground yesterday so then dad said it is so shiny and
clean do you want to go and play with your Lego now dad said oh ok let’s go.
Hey mum look oh what is that well mum it is a Lego piece hey
Amber can you come here for a minute please. Ok mum I’m coming.
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