“Ugh this toy box is so uncomfortable,” said Bob “I wanna go outside!!”
“Be quiet. The hooman’s might be coming back!” said Jill
“They just left.” said James.
Bob, James and Jill were three best friends… But let’s get back to the story. Oh wait I forgot!! Bob, James and Jill were Lego people. Yep, Lego people.
Thump, thump, thump.
“See I told you!!” whispered Jill “Oh no BOB!!!”
Bob was outside now and there red bugs with black dots on their back.
“Oh no!” thought Bob “I’m outside and being attacked.”
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