I stood in the doorway of a shop called CRAFTY kidz. I can’t believe i’m doing this….this is such a baby place. I thought, as I opened the door. Someone came running to the door to greet me.
“Come! Come and take a seat at a table!” She said.
I had a look around, and the place looked like a CASTLE with WHITE walls and there were LEAVES all over the floor. I saw kids ROLLING around in paint! I decided that this place looks quite fun after all. I went to sit on a chair at a table.
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