It was dark outside as my best friend Olivia crept outside and into her Dad's secret shed about 20 meters away. However, she couldn't believe what she had done.
She had stolen her Dads spy computer. But she didn't know that her Dad was a spy so she didn't know what she was about to see. As she lifted the lid a tracking device with a red dot near the middle was flashing she didn't know what was going on where her parents even human?
She had stolen her Dads spy computer. But she didn't know that her Dad was a spy so she didn't know what she was about to see. As she lifted the lid a tracking device with a red dot near the middle was flashing she didn't know what was going on where her parents even human?
By Abbie
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