Tuesday, June 26, 2018

Ava Craig 100WC Week #37

Kids get up mum was saying at 6:30 yesterday morning your going on the bus do we have to go on the bus and why are you waking us up so early and the bus doesn't leave till 7:00 am  Ava said you and your brother have to walk down to the bus stop mum said and plus it had been raining all morning why is my life so miserable I might get sick from the rain Ava said yea what if we get a cold cole said oh well I need to get to work I have a meating so i’m sorry but i've gotta go right now.
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  1. AnonymousAugust 12, 2018 at 4:12 PM

    Hi Ava
    I really liked your energy in the story
    Next time you write add some punctuation
    From Rita

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