¨Thanks¨ replied Amy
¨Keep up the good work¨
¨Okay, will do¨ said Amy
When Amy got home she practiced and practiced and she was doing her twirls with a straight leg and there was a vase. ¨CRASH!BANG!¨ WOW WHAT just happened. Her Mum heard the big bang and came in straight away ¨What happened?¨ Amy WAS sitting there crying because it was her favourite thing in the whole word and she was crying then her Mum said ¨WHAT DID YOU DO!¨ However, she couldn’t believe what she had done!
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