Thursday, June 7, 2018

100WC Week #34 - by Charlee gubb

POPPY RENDER
Once upon a  time there stood a huge pink castle with a drawbridge the size of nineteen men on top of each other, the castle belonged to poppy render, who was princess of the seven dimensions. Poppy render always wore blue dresses sprinkled with tiny yellow daffodils, and she  loved the color blue and yellow and loved to grow candy-trees, i mean she had a WHOLE GROVE OF THEM, which is pretty impressive since they need fizzy drink and fizzy drink is quite rare you know. Poppy loved to go for walks around the round town and the people of round town loved her…  EVERYONE loved her. OH i better go POPPY RENDER'S COMING.

3 comments:

  1. Nice job charlee this was interesting to me

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  2. hi charlee great story that castle sounds lovely and I´d love to have a candy tree but just remember to have a big I.

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  3. Great job Charlee The story was very well describer and informational for next time make it a bit more interesting with a cliff hanger.
    Aidan

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