In a far away land long long ago
there was a guy who died when he picked up a piece of rope. The piece of
rope had a disease on it that could kill. Whoever touched it died straight away. He
was the first person to touch the rope and he touched the rope because he was a
scientist that was experiencing the rope. But one day he forgot to put his gloves
on and he died and because of his bravery he got hands holding a piece of
rope and his name lived on.
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