And action!
¨Ow my head it hurts¨ howled olie.
¨Well our plane just fell and the seat belt hit your head¨ explained Emmy.
¨How about we go and explore this mysterious place?¨ asked Katy
¨Sounds good let's go¨ Caitlyn agreed.
¨Wow this place is a mess!¨ Emmy shouted.
¨Who goes there?¨Farmer All shouted.
¨Umm noone¨Katy shrieked.
¨Well it must be someone if there's a voice¨ Farmer All said grumpily.
¨N N No¨Emmy said shakily.
¨You have made me so mad now¨ growled Farmer All.
¨Hey why are you grumpy?¨Caitlyn said.
Didn't you hear what I said!¨Farmer All Was furious now.
And cut!
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