I was on my red scooter scootering on the concrete when I saw a fluffy bunny dancing on the side of the road. So I danced along with it. Suddenly it vanished into thin air! I saw a hole in the ground where the bunny had been dancing! I really shouldn’t go down the hole, I thought. I ignored the voices inside my head, and jumped into the hole…
I slid down the dark tunnel, the wall was cold and damp and my heart was pounding. I slid out of the tunnel, I turned around and the tunnel was gone…
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