Tuesday, October 27, 2020

100WC - Week #8 - Mia

 She stood there, ready for coach Tom to blow the whistle. “Can you blow the whistle?” Bella Said.

“Bella...don’t be rude!” Said  Tom.

She just ignored him, and waited for the whistle to blow...5 seconds later, (Which actually felt like 10 years) the whistle finally blew. “Finally-” Bella started. But she couldn’t finish her sentence because Jack, flipped her upside down, and flung her on her back. All her breath was knocked out of her. She slowly got back up and exhausted & breathing hard, she simply raised her fists, she aimed her fist at his face….and POW! 
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  1. AnonymousNovember 4, 2020 at 2:47 PM

    Hi Mia I liked how you yused comas and the way you pronounced your story.

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