Tuesday, August 11, 2020

100WC - Week #46 - Carla

Oh no there was a guy chasing me because i was in his

property trying to find some grass for my hamsters they needed

a bed so then he was running after me ... but when i looked behind me…

i saw him not trying to get me any more so i just started to walk along the

streets trying to find my house but then i looked behind me again because

i heard running coming from behind me i looked and he was running full

speed so i quickly ran as fast as i could then. Oh no please help!


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  1. KateAugust 11, 2020 at 5:49 PM

    Hi Carla,
    I really like your story, I really like how you added, Oh no please help! at the end, it really game your story more detail. I would suggest next time to add more commas and full stops. Also try to improve using your capital letter for things such a I. I love your story, keep doing well!
    Kate R.

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