Once I was fishing on the cold sea then I spotted a cute grizzly bear.
It was on a big gigantic piece of ice and was floating away. So I decided
to see if I could help it then. When I got to it then it started to try to come to
me as well so i went closer. Hello i said pating the bear as it licked me and i
could tell that it liked me so. I tied the roap onto the ice then pilled it. When
we got to shore it ran away then i spotted a ...
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