In a very remote place in the antarctic slightly submerged in the water were icebergs float by and get dangerously close to the building,
“Fred it could be confirmed that polar bears are extinct” murmurs Fred’s father
“No” shouts Fred
“Look daddy”.
As Fred's father turns round he sees a polar bear stranded on an iceberg, shock fills Fred’s father,
then as the iceberg floated closer and closer then, Bang, the ice berg had hit the building
then they heard the polar bear moaning down stairs ¨AAAAHHHHH RUN!!!¨ shouts Fred ¨Its ok Freddy ¨ answers Fred's father ¨ It's ok ¨
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