Brrrmmmmmmmmmm, a fast car roared past my house .My baby sister woke up screaming in terror, thinking it was a monster coming to eat her! Then all of a sudden there was a bang!” What in the world just happened?” My grandma said. My mum came running out of her bedroom at great speed. “What was that?” she yelled. “ We don't know!” we yelled back. Me and my family quickly put our shoes on and ran down the street, a big crowd followed us. “What on earth has happened here?” There was a car in someone's house!
Oh my goodness Hayden, what a disaster! I really enjoyed the vivid way you introduced the events and managed to convey the sense of worry and concern in your characters. But how *did* the car end up the roof though; I'd have loved to have read your ideas.
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hi Hayden good job keep the good work up from Ella
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