The Big Hole
Me and my friend were walking downtown and we went into the woods to try to find our hut. Then we saw a giant hole! “Woah” I said “Look at the size of that hole!”
“I know it’s crazy,” he said. Then we saw a sign that said “WARNING DO NOT JUMP” I looked over at our hut which was across from the hole, “How are we supposed to get there now?” I said
“I don’t know but we have to get there fast because the sun is setting!” said my friend
Suddenly we got kicked from behind launching us into the hole! I saw a giant flower.
“Woah” I said as we landed on it.
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