“Gotcha” yelled our friends. We went off to go back home for the party then mum asked “why are you on the T.V”, then dad walked in and asked
“What is going on” dad asked.
“We seemed to be on the television” I replied confused.
Sunday, November 25, 2018
100WC #12 - Olivia
One day my sister and I were going downtown to meet our friends at the park for my birthday then all of a sudden we heard noises coming from the tree, so we went to check it out. There was nobody there, then we heard noises coming from behind us. We slowly turned around…
“Gotcha” yelled our friends. We went off to go back home for the party then mum asked “why are you on the T.V”, then dad walked in and asked
“What is going on” dad asked.
“We seemed to be on the television” I replied confused.
“Gotcha” yelled our friends. We went off to go back home for the party then mum asked “why are you on the T.V”, then dad walked in and asked
“What is going on” dad asked.
“We seemed to be on the television” I replied confused.
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I liked how you expressed your confused expression when you saw yourself on the television. How were you on tv? Was there a secret camera in the room that was recording you and your surroundings? I think you could’ve added what exactly on the tv, your background and surroundings, who else was on, etc.
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Mohammad