Monday, November 5, 2018

100WC Week #9 - Lucian

There was a restaurant that my family would go to, every fortnight. There was also a door at the back of the restaurant, people told rumors about that door. Everyone's ideas were dumb, I think it's just another way of getting into the kitchen or were they kept their food. I wondered what was behind the door all the time every time me and my family went to this restaurant. One day I saw a employee walk over towards the door. He looked around the room and opened the door. He opened the door wide open. I couldn’t believe my eyes.
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2 comments:

  1. rmannellNovember 11, 2018 at 3:18 PM

    Hello Lucian,

    Your ability to build your storyline demonstrates your growing skills in writing. You set the scene, your family routines and a mystery. Well done.

    Your open ended story certainly set my mind wondering what was so surprising behind the restaurant door. If it were to continue, it could head in a number of directions. The open ended story can be a great way to engage your readers and have them hoping the story will continue. Again, well done.

    Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia

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  2. Ross Mannell Team 100WCNovember 11, 2018 at 6:24 PM

    Hello Lucian,

    Your ability to build your storyline demonstrates your growing skills in writing. You set the scene, your family routines and a mystery. Well done.

    Your open ended story certainly set my mind wondering what was so surprising behind the restaurant door. If it were to continue, it could head in a number of directions. The open ended story can be a great way to engage your readers and have them hoping the story will continue. Again, well done.

    Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia

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