I wondered what was behind the door as I approached it.
There was a strange noise coming from behind it. It was like someone crying but
they weren’t a human. And it wasn’t like a dog whimpering. It sounded really
really ugly. I wondered if I should go and get Mum but then I remembered that
she was out. I started to panic realising that I wasn’t meant to be here. BANG the door shut. I tried to open it but it
was locked and I didn’t have the keys.
‘What do I do now?’ I thought.
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