When we got to the theatre we got popcorn and walked into a horrible Gorilla. The main character had a pretty yellow dress on and was walking past a building when suddenly a Gorilla crashed through the bricks when the main character saw it she started running away screaming. The Gorilla began chasing the main character whose name was Mrs Calgen ( if your last name is Calgen it is a coincidence.) Mrs Calgen ran into a building and shouted ¨a Gorillas coming.¨ Then the screen blacked out. The theatre blacked out. When the lights were on everyone's food was gone.
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