Wednesday, November 7, 2018

Abbie 100wc #9

It was 7:30pm and the sun was down. But there was this sound that had been coming from my linen cupboard since this morning but I haven't bothered to look at it since. It had been creeking all day and sometimes it wound open a bit and then shut again. It was quite freaky so that why I just stayed away from it but  still I wondered what was behind the door.

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  1. AnonymousNovember 8, 2018 at 9:01 AM

    I liked your story but maybe add more detail, like why the cupboard was making the sound. This story could have way more than 100 words, like when the cupboard arrived, why it was making the noise, and then you checked the noise and what was in the cupboard making the noise, why those things were making the noise and so on. I feel you could improve your story by addig more sensory detail to know what the noises and cupboard was like.

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    Mohammad

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